My Summer in Jacksonville, Florida

By Anonymous (not verified), 16 March, 2026
My Summer in Jacksonville, Florida Every summer I go to Jacksonville, FL to work with my dad. He is a carpeter. I get paid really good. After work my dad and I play a game of basketball. He usually wins. At night my dad is in a band. He goes to the band room plays. They get to play at bars and one night I got to go. After they played they met Alabama Shakes and Sheer Mag. I went to a Dee Brown Basketball Camp I stayed overnight for a whole week. We got to ask questons but I did’nt have any. We also had an autograph sesion. He autographed mine but I lost it. Me and my dad made it a tradition to go see one football game a year. The Dee Brown camp was at Jacksonville University, and the minor leauge baseball team the suns play right next door. One night at my dad’s big trailer, I was watching t.v. and saw a comercial it was a giant lizard in goal and someone shot at him and he took his tounge snatched the puck and spit it back out. While I was down there I had a girl friend next door named Angie. Then after all that fun I said good bye to my little brother and my dad, got on the plane and feel my emotions start to kick in. the end.
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