Writing a Personal Narrative
Once you finish prewriting, you are ready to tell your story in writing. These activities will help you hook the reader's attention at the beginning, build interest through a sequence of events, and lead to a strong ending for your personal narrative. You'll also read another student's narrative to see how all of the parts came together.
Writing the Beginning Paragraph
The first few sentences in your narrative should grab the reader’s attention. They are called the lead. The following activity will help you write an effective lead.
Write a lead.
For each strategy that follows, write a lead that could work for your personal narrative.
- Start in the middle of the action.
Suddenly, I heard a crash downstairs and the sound of breaking glass. “Hey, who’s down there?” I yelled.
- Have the characters talk.
My brother’s lips were so swollen, it sounded like he said, “Mine guess who fur hiss!”
“What?” I said.
He glared at me and said louder, “I’ll get you for this!”
- Begin with a surprising statement or fact.
When I was nine, I started my dad’s car and drove onto the street. I thought I was going to New Jersey.
- Give some important background information.
It was a beautiful August morning. The sun was brightly shining on my sunglasses while my mother drove the U-haul truck to a warehouse in Santa Ana, California. As my mother drove down the streets of Santa Ana, I looked out the window and began to realize that the mixture of people was no longer a mixture; there was only white.
Write your beginning paragraph.
Write your lead and give more details to introduce your experience.
Beginning Paragraph
Writing the Middle Paragraphs
Use narrative strategies.
Review each narrative strategy and write examples that could work in your own personal narrative.
- Use plenty of details. Help readers see, hear, and feel the experience.
I had to peel my arm off the side of the hot door like a burnt sausage off a skillet.
- Work in dialogue. The characters’ words can help move the action along.
He replied with a smile, “All right, you can pick up your items in the back in about five minutes.”
My mother said, “Thank you,” in a nice, friendly voice and walked across the scorched pavement to drive the truck to the back.
- Include explanations when necessary. This will help keep things clear.
About every 15 minutes, a salesperson followed us around and asked if we needed help. My mother really dislikes it when she gets hounded in a store. She feels if she needs help, she’ll ask for it.
- Add thought details. Help readers understand how the experience affected you.
I didn’t know racism was still around; I thought that situation had died along with Dr. King.
Write your middle paragraphs.
Write the middle part of your narrative, combining many of the narrative strategies from the previous activity. Use time-order transitions to connect details.
Middle Paragraphs
Writing the Ending Paragraph
Write your ending paragraph.
Read about ending strategies. Then create an ending to your narrative.
- Show what you have learned.
That was my first encounter with racism. It was just a small slice of reality—that not everyone will be as nice as you, your friends, and your family; that just because you politely smile at others doesn’t mean others will treat you the same.
- Make a connection with the reader.
This situation made me feel very out of place and confused. I didn’t expect to be treated that way. We are all civilized, intelligent, caring, peaceful people . . . or at least that is what I had believed.
Ending Paragraph
Reading a Personal Narrative Draft
Read a personal narrative draft.
Note how the writer put the parts together.
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The Racist Warehouse
Lead It was a beautiful August morning. The sun was brightly shining on my sunglasses while my mother drove the U-haul truck to a warehouse in Santa Ana, California. As my mother drove down the streets of Santa Ana, I looked out the window and began to realize that the mixture of people was no longer a mixture; there was only white.
When we arrived at the warehouse, I had to peel my arm off the side of the hot door like a burnt sausage off a skillet. There were not many cars in the parking lot, and I could see the heat waves. As we walked up the boiling pavement, it felt like we were trudging across a scorching desert. When we walked into the warehouse, there was a variety of electronic appliances to choose from, and about three-fourths of them were white.
Sensory Details About every 15 minutes, a salesperson followed us around and asked if we needed help. My mother really dislikes it when she gets hounded in a store. She feels if she needs help, she’ll ask for it. Finally, after about two and a half boring hours of looking for any scratches or marks on the dryers and refrigerators that might fit best in our new apartment, my mother picked a dryer and refrigerator that were just right. She then let the salesperson know, and he replied with a smile, “All right, you can pick up your items in the back in about five minutes.” My mother said, “Thank you,” in a nice, friendly voice and walked across the scorched pavement to drive the truck to the back.
Dialogue When we got to the back, there were three open spaces for picking up appliances. My mother chose the first parking spot she saw, which was by a white family’s car. Then she showed the employees the receipt for the appliances she had just bought. They said, “All right, we’ll be with you in just a minute.” While I waited for my mother, I looked over and smiled at the white lady in the next car, but instead of smiling back like a nice young woman, she frowned at me like I had something hanging from my nose. At first I thought, “Well, maybe she is having a bad day.” Then a few minutes later the people working at the warehouse started to look at my mother and me in a mean way. Then I figured that maybe something was on my face, but when I looked in the mirror, I saw nothing. At the time, I had spent only nine years and some months on this planet. I didn’t know racism was still around; I thought that situation had died along with Dr. King.
Explanations Five minutes passed, then ten, then fifteen. We sat there watching people get their appliances and leave. We seemed invisible to them. As I sat in the car, burning up and listening to one of the most boring radio stations my mother could possibly like, I was thinking, “We’d better leave or else I’ll go ballistic!” After 30 minutes had passed, my mother got frustrated and politely asked to have our items loaded. Five more minutes passed, and she asked again with an attitude. They replied, “We’ll be with you in a minute, ma’am.” I could tell she was beginning to get upset because she started to get that “don’t bother me” look. Five minutes later they finally packed our appliances on the truck.
Thought DetailsWhen we left the warehouse, I described to my mother what the other people were doing. She explained, “They were racist. They didn’t like us because we have different skin color.”
That was my first encounter with racism. It was just a small slice of reality—that not everyone will be as nice as you, your friends, and your family; that just because you politely smile at others doesn’t mean others will treat you the same. This situation made me feel very out of place and confused. I didn’t expect to be treated that way. We are all civilized, intelligent, caring, peaceful people . . . or at least that is what I had believed.