Editing Dialogue for Quotation Marks

Dialogue uses quotation marks. These special marks go before and after the exact words of the speaker.

Periods and commas that follow the speaker’s words always go inside the quotation marks.

Question marks and exclamation marks go inside the quotation marks when they punctuation the dialogue.

Revising to Add Sensory Details

To help your story come alive, you can add details about what you saw, heard, smelled, tasted, and touched. These are called sensory details.

Sensory details help you show readers what is happening, rather than just telling them. You can collect these details in a sensory chart.

Writing the Beginning Paragraph

The first sentence in your narrative should grab the reader’s attention. It is called a lead. The following strategies will help you write an effective lead.

1. Start in the middle of the action:

   I thought I was ready when I arrived at our school’s auditorium.

2. Start with dialogue:

   “Just wait a little longer,” said my grandpa.

3. Start with an interesting fact or statement:

   When Manny came to my school, I didn’t expect to become best friends.

Lead:

Introductory Details:

Prewriting to Focus Your Ideas

Warm-Up for Personal Narratives

All of us have important times in our lives. By thinking back to these times, we understand ourselves better. By sharing these times with those we love, we become closer. This lesson will help you think about events in your life.

What Is a Narrative?

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A narrative is a story. It tells something that happened, like in a book or a movie. But books and movies are not the only places to find good stories. Your experiences make great stories, too.

A personal narrative is a true story about something that happened in your life. You might share an exciting, surprising, or scary experience, like the time you went camping and saw a bear. Or you might share a moment when you learned an important lesson.

The best personal narratives include many details, helping readers feel like they are a part of the story, too. In this unit, you will write a true story from your own life in way that makes it come alive once again!

Thinking About a True Story

Before you can share a story, you need to remember all the important things that happened. Asking and answering the 5 W’s questions can activate your memory and help you record important details about your experience.

• Who was with me?
• What exactly happened?
• Where did this happen?
• When did this happen?
• Why did it happen?

Editing for the Future Tense

When you write about something that hasn’t happened yet, you should add will before the base form of the verb. This will change the sentence to the future tense, expressing action that will happen later. In a problem-solution essay, use the future tense to predict what will result if a solution goes into action.

In this example, the helping verb will shows that the verbs clean and beautify happen in the future.

1. I caught a butterfly.

   I will catch a butterfly.

2. I walk home from my neighbor’s house.
3. We clean the kitchen.
4. Workers painted the walls white.
5. My family goes to vacation in Florida.
6. My classmates and I perform in a play at the end of the year.
7. The rain cools down the pool water.
8. What happens next?

Revising Problem-Solution Essays

After you write a first draft, you'll be ready to start reviewing and revising. When you revise, you think about the "big picture," including the overall structure of your writing (beginning, middle, and ending) and the focus, main ideas, and supporting details you use. These activities will help you revise.

Revising to Choose Strong Support

In your problem-solution essay, strong reasons and supporting details will help you convince readers to care about the problem and agree with your solution. The best reasons and details are specific and tell something important about your subject.

Strong

A service project will make the park safer for play.

Weak

Cleaning will make the park better.

1. ___ Canceling gym class will be bad for kids.
   ___ Canceling gym class will make it harder for kids to stay in shape.   X  Canceling gym class will make it harder for kids to stay in shape.
2. ___ Kids will lose a safe place to play if the rec center closes.
     X  Kids will lose a safe place to play if the rec center closes.
   ___ Kids will lose out if the rec center closes.
3. ___ Reading books introduces you to new people and ideas.
     X  Reading books introduces you to new people and ideas.
   ___ You should learn about new people and ideas.
4. ___ Swimming lessons make your life better and help you a lot.
   ___ Swimming lessons help you stay afloat if you fall into water.   X  Swimming lessons help you stay afloat if you fall into water.
5. ___ The playground equipment is no good.
   ___ The playground equipment is rusty and unsteady.   X  The playground equipment is rusty and unsteady.
6. ___ Learning a second language teaches you about another culture.
     X  Learning a second language teaches you about another culture.
   ___ Learning a second language helps you learn about another language.

Writing the Beginning Paragraph

The first sentence is called the lead. This sentence is meant to capture your reader’s attention. In a problem-solution essay, the lead introduces the topic or problem in an interesting way.

1. Ask a question about the topic.

   Have you noticed all the trash at Rosemont Park?

2. Start with a surprising fact or detail about the topic.

   Last week, my brother cut his hand on a piece of broken glass at Rosemont Park. There’s glass everywhere.

3. Tell a little story about the topic.

   My family used to go to Rosemont Park every Sunday. . . .